olivestar
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JR here! Hi guys! I'm working on my story! I want to make a great comeback chapter!
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Post by olivestar on May 12, 2013 5:58:55 GMT -5
Yes
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olivestar
Kit
JR here! Hi guys! I'm working on my story! I want to make a great comeback chapter!
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Post by olivestar on May 12, 2013 12:22:21 GMT -5
Chapter 2!
Shimmerkit opened her eyes the next day. Bluekit was sleeping still but Shimmerkit was about to change that! She pawed Bluekit and said "Sister! Wake up! We need to explore the camp today!" Bluekit moaned "Ok..ok.. I'm awake!" She opened her eyes slowly to see the world. Bluekit smiled and mewed "Wow! The nursery looks like this?!?" Shimmerkit jumped into her sisters sight "Yup!" Bluekit giggled "Shimmerkit! You have such long fur!" She looked at hers. It was medium sized fur. Shimmerkit's almost touching the ground and it was sparkly! Bluekits was shiny and fluffy and a dark blue. Shimmerkit pulled her sister out of the nursery and Bluekits eyes grew large. The camp was huge! Bigger than anything in the world! Shimmerkit bolted away and Bluekit couldn't find her. A big brown tabby Tom with big green eyes stepped infront of her. He said "Hello!" Bluekit bolted away but he stopped her "scared of the deputy I see!" Bluekit looked at him. He kinda looked like her mother Applefoot. Same eye shape and size. And there pelts were both long and shades of brown. She said "H-hi.." She stuttered. (Bushwhisker broke out into song "Did I stutter stutter? D-d-d I?" Lol nope he didn't! This is what really happened!) bush whisker said "Don't be shy Bluekit! I'm your uncle!" Bluekit smiled "My uncle! Cool! Your the biggest east Tom I have ever seen!" Bushwhisker laughed "Than you haven't met Fire!" Bluekit said "Fire? Why doesn't have a warrior name!" Bushwhisker corrected her "He was a rouge. His grandfather was a warrior in this clan but he's in Starclan now. His name was Treeleap!" Bluekit mewed "Wow! I want a warrior name! They sound so cool!" Bushwhisker said "You were only born 2 days ago!" Bluekit shrugged.
Longstar was lounging on top of her den. Her long brown fur was sleek and clean. She looked at her son talking to her granddaughter. She smiled and wondered why she was blue. Not brown. A white head popped up and she smiled "Hello Shimmerkit! I'm surprised you made it up here.." Shimmerkit tilted her head "I just used all the rocks around. I leapt from one rock to another" Longstar was impressed a kit who was 2 days old got onto the highledge. Shimmerkit said "It's simple! Don't look at me like its hard!" Longstar said "2 day old kits should not be up here! But you earned it.." Shimmerkit growled "Im 3 days old! It's almost dusk now! So technically that's 3 days!" Shimmerkit than smiled "But thanks.." She curled up beside Longstar and purred. Longstar smiled and curled up to.
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olivestar
Kit
JR here! Hi guys! I'm working on my story! I want to make a great comeback chapter!
Posts: 46
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Post by olivestar on May 14, 2013 18:20:19 GMT -5
D: nobody replying!
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olivestar
Kit
JR here! Hi guys! I'm working on my story! I want to make a great comeback chapter!
Posts: 46
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Post by olivestar on May 16, 2013 15:23:26 GMT -5
I won't post anymore until I get a reply!
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Post by warriorcat on May 16, 2013 18:40:09 GMT -5
I really like your story so far...
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olivestar
Kit
JR here! Hi guys! I'm working on my story! I want to make a great comeback chapter!
Posts: 46
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Post by olivestar on May 17, 2013 7:38:45 GMT -5
Thanks! Now I will post the next chapter tommarow!
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olivestar
Kit
JR here! Hi guys! I'm working on my story! I want to make a great comeback chapter!
Posts: 46
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Post by olivestar on May 21, 2013 12:43:33 GMT -5
Guys! I'm back with a new chapter! I lost my Ipad charger and I just found it! I couldn't post it on my computer becuase I didn't have it their. Plus I'm sick so maybe double chapter day to say sorry!
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olivestar
Kit
JR here! Hi guys! I'm working on my story! I want to make a great comeback chapter!
Posts: 46
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Post by olivestar on May 21, 2013 13:20:09 GMT -5
Here's your new chapter!
Tigerkit was curled up asleep and purring as his mother licked him. Stonekit sat and watched eating a mouse. 4 moons had pasted and they were now 5 moons old. Stonekit grabbed the bones and padded to the dirt place. This was a simple day of cold wether. Leaf-bare was over and it was cold! Since he was born in leaf-fall he had never seen New-leaf. The buds on the trees were opening into leafs as the days went by. Stonekit had a lot in his mind. He bumped into a cat and saw it was Pooleyes. The medicine cat smiled "Why hello their kit. Do you need anything?" Stonekit shyly said "No.. I'm just putting my bones in the dirt place." Pooleyes nodded and padded away. Stonekit dropped his bones and gasped. A hawk was circling over camp! "He mewed to a group of warriors a few fox lengthens away "Help! A hawk is circling over me!..." Their eyes widened and they muttered "Don't move! Talk quietly so it doesent get scared and attack.
Shimmerkit padded out of the nursery. She saw Stonekit shaking and warriors murmuring what to do. Shimmerkit looked up and screamed "Hawk!!!!" At the top of her lungs. Warriors streamed around Stonekit and Shimmerkit wailed. The hawk screeched and swooped down. Warriors jumped on its back but it threw them off. It grabbed Stonekit and carried him away...
Tigerkit watched the whole thing. Tears welling in his eyes. Cougarbreeze and Brokenfang were sobbing over the loose of their other kit. Bluekit poked at Tigerkits back. Shimmerkit whispered "Psst! Tigerkit come here.." He went into a bush were the other kits were hiding. Shimmerkit said "Stonekit isn't dead.."
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olivestar
Kit
JR here! Hi guys! I'm working on my story! I want to make a great comeback chapter!
Posts: 46
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Post by olivestar on May 21, 2013 19:34:20 GMT -5
No replies!
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olivestar
Kit
JR here! Hi guys! I'm working on my story! I want to make a great comeback chapter!
Posts: 46
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Post by olivestar on May 22, 2013 15:41:16 GMT -5
I'm scared for Snowfeather
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Post by Mod Blackbolt on May 22, 2013 17:49:29 GMT -5
Please do not post twice in succession, your last post was also quite unnecessary as talk like that is what the chat is for.
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olivestar
Kit
JR here! Hi guys! I'm working on my story! I want to make a great comeback chapter!
Posts: 46
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Post by olivestar on May 22, 2013 20:48:33 GMT -5
Sorry.. It's just that Snowfeather is my closest friend here..
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Post by Snowfeather on May 24, 2013 18:16:14 GMT -5
Ah don't be worried about me ^^ But you shouldn't stop your story just to wait for someone's posts you have to remember there aren't unlimited amounts of members posting and only a few that actually get on.Some don't read every story that's posted but that's fine of course, waiting for someone to respond would only slow your story down and most like to respond at the main climax not every part Don't take it that others don't like your story, it's great, just not all enjoy reading the post so it takes some time to get a response c:
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olivestar
Kit
JR here! Hi guys! I'm working on my story! I want to make a great comeback chapter!
Posts: 46
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Post by olivestar on May 27, 2013 7:17:22 GMT -5
Thanks snow! I'm so glad your ok! Now I can relax! I prayed for you every night!
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