Post by piplup10036 on Nov 2, 2012 21:40:40 GMT -5
I'd like to apologize ahead of time for posting so much MLP this week, I've been working on this story with a few friends and thought some of you might like to read a little rough draft of the First Chapter from the story so here it goes ;D
Chapter 1: Final Winds:
I walked over the white fuzzy carpet to grab my white hoof knit bag with a red cross for Med school today and analyzed through it, inside was:
The Book of Common Illnesses and Cures Twilight Sparkle let me take out of her Library for the school year, While I know the procedures and steps to help cure most of the illnesses the book had offer, It was nice to keep around in case I forget something important that could be on a quiz,test, or exam.
Next was the still brand new never opened First aid kit, the plastic case was slightly cracked on the back, I'm glad I really haven't needed to use it yet.
Then there is my lunch, it's in a nice brown bag with my name wrote on it containing five carrots and a nice bottle of apple juice from Sweet Apple Acres.
And last was a research paper on the Poison Joke flower and the dangers of eating them, the thought of eating that awful flower just gives me the chills. I grabbed my bag and set it into my saddlebag ready to head off to the College when all of a sudden I heard a loud crash from the other room in my apartment,
"Oh not again!, please don't be as bad as last month" I thought with lots of worry as I rushed to the other room.
"Derpy what happened are you alright!" I spoke with worry.
"I'm okay Fluttershy, I only fell off the top of our bunk-bed no worries." Derpy had informed.
"You really should be more careful getting up in the morning, remember last month when you fell off the bed, out the window, landed on the ground, and then broke a wing?" I reminded her.
"Yeah, that wasn't all that fun going through all that pain and having to that make up exam on the history of the Mailing services." Derpy complained.
"Are you sure now that your fine, you don't need anything at all right now? It would make feel just awful knowing that my friend here could be hurt and isn't feeling well while I'm at Med school and needs my help." I replied in the usual caring tone.
"Yeah Fluttershy I'm okay." Derpy informed.
"Okay, that's great!, I packed your lunch for college today for you its where it always is hope you do well on that quiz!" I said in a rushing tone as I headed out for med school.
The wind was just awfully gusty outside today so I put on my pink leather flight cap and bright yellow goggles, spread out my cream wings, and took off towards the college. When I got pretty close to the college, I couldn't see a thing over the now heavy winds and fogs. I followed a bright red set of landing lights the college had in case of dense fog and wind like this. I had safely landed on the shockingly cold landing spot and dashed to get inside. I was on the first of four floors. On the first floor was the student check in list which seemed to be almost blank, which was weird class is going to be starting in ten minuets. Then again, with weather like this maybe most of the class couldn't get here. To the left of the list, was the hallway towards my class. I walked on slightly cool, hard green-black marble tiles up to beat up rusty check in list, took a hold of the green pen in my mouth and wrote my name and time of arrival on the sheet. Something felt weird, I chuckled how silly I was still wearing my flight cap and goggles inside the building, I quickly fiddled around to take them off before somepony noticed I was still wearing them. Down the bland dulled yellow brick wall hallway was my classroom, inside to my surprise was my teacher and...only two other classmates inside the room, which was re-painted to be just plain white to match the black marble tiles.
"Fluttershy! I'm surprised you could make it here today with all the chaos going on around here in Cloudsdale today!" Spoke the Dr.Frizzy Hooves, my teacher.
"What chaos? Are you referring to the storm outside today " I inquired my teacher.
"No my dear Fluttershy, well, kind of, here just read this article from last nights news" The doctor said while scrambling to grab the article.
I grabbed the article from blue frizzy hoofed doctor. The article read:
"Terrible disease spreads like wild fire to Ponyville and Cloudsdale! hundreds of pegasi afflicted!,
Disease leaves the afflicted unable to spread their wings out and freezing pains in the wing area!, Symptoms include long lasting flu,chills,hypothermia, and strep throat. Doctors working on a possible cure."
"Oh my this sounds awful Dr.Frizzy Hooves! I really hope they can find a cure for this." I responded to with a fearful tone.
"And that's why nopony has showed up for class today, you three are the only pegasi they haven't caught this odd disease called the 'Freezy Wings' Spoke Dr.Frizzy Hooves.
"So doc, whats the assignment for today or lesson today?" Spoke one of my classmates, He was a toothpaste green and had a pale yellow an dark red mixed color mane, not sure what his name was.
"Today I want you to hand in your reports on the Poison Joke flower and go home where you'll be safe from the Freezy Wings, the end results of the sickness so far have been very fatal." Dr.Frizzy Hooves said in a rather odd serious tone, you know something is serious when he isn't in his normal goofy relaxed mood. I rummaged around though my saddlebag for the five paged report of the Poison Joke and placed it into the the very bright red bin that had read:
"Needs to be graded" the bin was one of the many things on Dr.Frizzy Hooves' hard brown oak wood desk. I walked out of the classroom and back down the dull yellow brick hallway and talked to the nice mare at the front desk, her name as I sadly knew was cherry,she was grey with a dark black mane and bright red glasses, I had to inform her class had been canceled today with Dr.Frizzy Hooves or else I might have been written up for trying to skip class. After that I put on my flight gear and flew back the apartment where I've had to live, the school won't accept you unless you live in Cloudsdale or live with somepony in Cloudsdale. The winds had started to get to strong for me to fly in and there was little I could see with weather this bad. My cream colored wings started to quickly give in and unwillingly folded back to my sides as I started to panic trying to get them back out I just couldn't the strong winds had been just to powerful for my wings. I quickly grew dizzy and things had started getting blurry as I passed out from the fear and tiredness, I shouldn't have pushed my self so hard to only get home, why haven't I been acting like my quite scared self that much.
Thanks for reading it if you read that all give me some (constructive) feedback on how you liked it or how it could be better. Thanks ;D
Chapter 1: Final Winds:
I walked over the white fuzzy carpet to grab my white hoof knit bag with a red cross for Med school today and analyzed through it, inside was:
The Book of Common Illnesses and Cures Twilight Sparkle let me take out of her Library for the school year, While I know the procedures and steps to help cure most of the illnesses the book had offer, It was nice to keep around in case I forget something important that could be on a quiz,test, or exam.
Next was the still brand new never opened First aid kit, the plastic case was slightly cracked on the back, I'm glad I really haven't needed to use it yet.
Then there is my lunch, it's in a nice brown bag with my name wrote on it containing five carrots and a nice bottle of apple juice from Sweet Apple Acres.
And last was a research paper on the Poison Joke flower and the dangers of eating them, the thought of eating that awful flower just gives me the chills. I grabbed my bag and set it into my saddlebag ready to head off to the College when all of a sudden I heard a loud crash from the other room in my apartment,
"Oh not again!, please don't be as bad as last month" I thought with lots of worry as I rushed to the other room.
"Derpy what happened are you alright!" I spoke with worry.
"I'm okay Fluttershy, I only fell off the top of our bunk-bed no worries." Derpy had informed.
"You really should be more careful getting up in the morning, remember last month when you fell off the bed, out the window, landed on the ground, and then broke a wing?" I reminded her.
"Yeah, that wasn't all that fun going through all that pain and having to that make up exam on the history of the Mailing services." Derpy complained.
"Are you sure now that your fine, you don't need anything at all right now? It would make feel just awful knowing that my friend here could be hurt and isn't feeling well while I'm at Med school and needs my help." I replied in the usual caring tone.
"Yeah Fluttershy I'm okay." Derpy informed.
"Okay, that's great!, I packed your lunch for college today for you its where it always is hope you do well on that quiz!" I said in a rushing tone as I headed out for med school.
The wind was just awfully gusty outside today so I put on my pink leather flight cap and bright yellow goggles, spread out my cream wings, and took off towards the college. When I got pretty close to the college, I couldn't see a thing over the now heavy winds and fogs. I followed a bright red set of landing lights the college had in case of dense fog and wind like this. I had safely landed on the shockingly cold landing spot and dashed to get inside. I was on the first of four floors. On the first floor was the student check in list which seemed to be almost blank, which was weird class is going to be starting in ten minuets. Then again, with weather like this maybe most of the class couldn't get here. To the left of the list, was the hallway towards my class. I walked on slightly cool, hard green-black marble tiles up to beat up rusty check in list, took a hold of the green pen in my mouth and wrote my name and time of arrival on the sheet. Something felt weird, I chuckled how silly I was still wearing my flight cap and goggles inside the building, I quickly fiddled around to take them off before somepony noticed I was still wearing them. Down the bland dulled yellow brick wall hallway was my classroom, inside to my surprise was my teacher and...only two other classmates inside the room, which was re-painted to be just plain white to match the black marble tiles.
"Fluttershy! I'm surprised you could make it here today with all the chaos going on around here in Cloudsdale today!" Spoke the Dr.Frizzy Hooves, my teacher.
"What chaos? Are you referring to the storm outside today " I inquired my teacher.
"No my dear Fluttershy, well, kind of, here just read this article from last nights news" The doctor said while scrambling to grab the article.
I grabbed the article from blue frizzy hoofed doctor. The article read:
"Terrible disease spreads like wild fire to Ponyville and Cloudsdale! hundreds of pegasi afflicted!,
Disease leaves the afflicted unable to spread their wings out and freezing pains in the wing area!, Symptoms include long lasting flu,chills,hypothermia, and strep throat. Doctors working on a possible cure."
"Oh my this sounds awful Dr.Frizzy Hooves! I really hope they can find a cure for this." I responded to with a fearful tone.
"And that's why nopony has showed up for class today, you three are the only pegasi they haven't caught this odd disease called the 'Freezy Wings' Spoke Dr.Frizzy Hooves.
"So doc, whats the assignment for today or lesson today?" Spoke one of my classmates, He was a toothpaste green and had a pale yellow an dark red mixed color mane, not sure what his name was.
"Today I want you to hand in your reports on the Poison Joke flower and go home where you'll be safe from the Freezy Wings, the end results of the sickness so far have been very fatal." Dr.Frizzy Hooves said in a rather odd serious tone, you know something is serious when he isn't in his normal goofy relaxed mood. I rummaged around though my saddlebag for the five paged report of the Poison Joke and placed it into the the very bright red bin that had read:
"Needs to be graded" the bin was one of the many things on Dr.Frizzy Hooves' hard brown oak wood desk. I walked out of the classroom and back down the dull yellow brick hallway and talked to the nice mare at the front desk, her name as I sadly knew was cherry,she was grey with a dark black mane and bright red glasses, I had to inform her class had been canceled today with Dr.Frizzy Hooves or else I might have been written up for trying to skip class. After that I put on my flight gear and flew back the apartment where I've had to live, the school won't accept you unless you live in Cloudsdale or live with somepony in Cloudsdale. The winds had started to get to strong for me to fly in and there was little I could see with weather this bad. My cream colored wings started to quickly give in and unwillingly folded back to my sides as I started to panic trying to get them back out I just couldn't the strong winds had been just to powerful for my wings. I quickly grew dizzy and things had started getting blurry as I passed out from the fear and tiredness, I shouldn't have pushed my self so hard to only get home, why haven't I been acting like my quite scared self that much.
Thanks for reading it if you read that all give me some (constructive) feedback on how you liked it or how it could be better. Thanks ;D
