Post by bramblepaw on Jul 25, 2012 12:01:05 GMT -5
"Firestar Firestar" "What is it Cinderpelt? "Starclan sent me a dream. They said cats of a different forest are coming to our forest to try to take the whole forest from us. And that there will be blood shed. I have to go check on Morningflower she has whitecough." )What does starclan mean)*Grrrr!* Fox! There's 5! Yowl! Spiderleg!
Post by Shadowstalker on Jul 25, 2012 14:53:23 GMT -5
Chapters are much larger than a tiny paragraph. The average chapter is 14 paragraphs long. You also need to work on your grammar before you make a novel. It is very confusing and s far too rushed. Needs lots of work.