Post by bramblepaw on Jul 24, 2012 15:35:27 GMT -5
In a forest hidden In darkness lives a group of clans different then we know who always fight for territory. Normaly from differet cats not of that forest their territorys are miles and miles long and now they have heard of the forest we know. What is it Eaglestar? I smell badger. How many? At least 3 or 4. Puddlepaw warn the other warriors. O.K.. Eaglestar Nightclan told me of another 4 clans, but they said to be prepaired there will be blood shed.
Post by *Midnightsoul* on Jul 24, 2012 22:39:03 GMT -5
May I make some suggestions?
It'd be much easier to read if you used quotes (" ") when the characters are talking, and specify who's talking. Also, it might be a good idea to use the Spellcheck button that ProBoards provides when making a post (you have to press the "reply" button for it; you can't use the quick reply box for it without a code), and maybe proofread it- or even get an editor- to check for punctuation, among other things.
Sorry if any of that sounds rude; I'm honestly only trying to help, and I apologize if you didn't want anyone posting here.